Once there was a beautiful place called Llama land. It was full of tall, short, skinny and fat llamas each and everyone a different colour. Llama land was full of fresh green grass that made the beautiful blue summer sky have a hint of green.
Llama land was home to a girl called Lily. Lily’s long shiny hair would shimmer in the summer light. Lily loved to brush out the llamas curly hair so Lily’s tall figure came in handy.
One day Lily was picking flowers in the forest and she came across a flower she had never seen before. It was quite beautiful. It had an amethyst center that grew into a light purple that would shimmer when the summer sky emerged through the branches of the pine trees. Lily could not resist so she picked a bunch and went on her way. But what Lily did not know was that these flowers were in seed so every step Lily took another seed would fall out making another beautiful bush with sparkling purple flowers.
A group of blue green and pink llamas came along and ate some of this beautiful purple flower. A minute or two later the llamas collapsed. Lily heard their moaning cries and ran as fast as she could, adrenalin rushing through her body with her heart pumping. Finally Lily found them. Her heart stopped. Lily did not understand why the llamas were crying and why they were whimpering. There it was out the corner of Lily’s eye - she saw that same purple flower Lily had picked just minutes ago.
Lily felt like bursting into tears. But she had to be strong. Lily dropped the flowers and helped the llamas one by one to get away from this ghastly flower. The llamas were not safe there were 20 or so more plants. That night in bed Lily was thinking ‘How can I save these llamas and make them feel safe again?’ Lily fell fast asleep but with a fantastic idea in her head.
Lily was going to build a fence but not just any fence this fence would be 15 feet tall so no llamas could jump over it there would be concrete under the fence so no llama or any animal could dig underneath it. The fence would have no gaps so no llama big or small could squeeze through. Llama land was going to be safe again llamas would go throughout their day knowing that they would be safe.
Lily went and cut down some trees and asked the local tree cutter to cut them into long thick strips. He agreed. After long and hard days and nights Lily had finished the fence. Lily was impressed and proud of herself and what she had accomplished. So were the llamas of llama land and for that they made her Queen and everyone and llamas of the world lived happily ever after.
Great use of descriptive language to add detail. Your NLS are to remember to use capital letters for names and to use the possessive apostrophe eg: Madi's Narrative correctly. I'm also really pleased with the effort in correcting your spelling!! :)
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