THE SECRET GOLDEN ACORN
On a bright sunny December day just a few days before Christmas Natalie and Mary were chilling by the pool. They were two best friends enjoying their summer holiday, tanning their slim sleek bodies letting their long shiny blond hair blow in the wind and just taking it easy. That evening Mary and Natalie were asked by Jane (Mary’s mum) to go and buy some milk. Off they set down the clean sleek street of Summerville. As they wandered they marked landmarks to make sure they did not get lost. Then as Natalie and Mary crossed the road to go into the dairy they saw a shortcut home. A sign said shortcut to Mulberry Lane 2km. They got excited as they could get home faster. So they went into the dairy and bought milk and started down the shortcut road.
Five minutes passed and they were still walking. Fifteen minutes passed and they were still walking. They knew something was wrong and they had to make a plan. They stopped at a nearby tree to rest and to plan their next move. When they looked around they were surrounded by trees and forest. There were no signs or other paths only the one dirt road. As they sat figuring out their next move night began to fall and the wind became strong. Mary and Natalie knew they had to make a move to try and get home. The two friends carried on down the road and as a horrible gush of wind flew through their long blond hair far in the distance they saw a light that looked like a lamp post. They hurried to the light and when they reached it they saw two signs and two paths. One on the right said to Mulberry Lane and the other had no name. Down the left they saw a bright shining light and of course they wanted to get home but they wanted to find out what it was.
Mary and Natalie ran down the left lane as fast as they could and as they got closer the glow began to take shape. The closer they got the more it became clearer. There hanging from the tree was a golden acorn. Mary gasped and began to tell Natalie the story about the golden acorn.
“It is a secret sent by the the elders to guide people and only true friends can see and remove it.”
They both felt honored and hurried up to it. Natalie gently lifted it off the tree and hid it in her colourful jacket. From that day on it became their secret friendship acorn that only they knew about .
Shortly after picking it they walked back and went down the right path. About ten minutes later they came out on Mulberry Lane.They stood there staring at number ten Mulberry Lane both sighing with relief, both excited to be home again. As they entered the gate Jane came rushing out and threw her arms around both of them. Then she asked in a voice of relief where they had been. They smiled at each other, hiding the secret acorn behind them they said with a giggle
“we went on a ADVENTURE”.
BY:Caitlyn Spies
Good use of paragraphs, and a variety of sentences. Your next learning steps are to always use capital letters for names, to use the spell checker each time and to add more detail to your character descriptions.
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