Planet Earth 1000 Years Later.
One century there was a planet called Zebrlug which is a very, very small planet with a large population.
The planet Zeblurg is a planet where most of the population have a very high IQ (2x better than regular humans). Four people named Mosh, Michael, Adam and Elizabeth built an incredible spaceship that could pull a planet which they are going to use to pull next to their planet.
The family explored and explored even though they got sick most of the way through. They passed many many planets but they were either too cold, too hot or just unable to be lived on. The people on Zeblurg were desperate to get more space. Everyone was depending on them since the size of their planet is smaller than Pluto. ”We need more space!” shouted the Zeblurgarians.
The family has been travelling for four and a half months and they haven’t eaten in days. Fortunately they found souffles. Finally after a few days they found a clean green planet called Earth. It was green with clean oxygen and fresh water to drink just like Zeblurg.
The family hovered down to planet Earth to observe what happens and what lives on the planet. The Zeblurgarians came out of the space shuttle and tried communicating with the earthlings but they were too busy protesting, fighting and having wars.
The Zeblugarians thought that this was horrible and they knew what this plant used to look like but now it has changed. But one of them had a plan.
The Zeblurgariand pulled planet Earth right next to them and thought of building a long tunnel. But before that they decided to put up a L.C.D screen around their planet with a force field around it. The L.C.D screen played a video of zeblurg and waited for the earthlings to react.
After the earthlings realised where they were they got all their missiles, rocket ships and bombs to throw at the planet. The video playback was pretending that they were hitting the planet when it was only a forcefield. The video played that they blew the planet up and the earthlings celebrated.
Zeblurg sent a hologram to earth and explained to them slowly what happened and why they did that and since they were both humans they decided to work together and lived happily ever after especially Adam, Mosh, Michael and Elizibeth received a huge reward and lived like kings.
Well done Vincent. Your NLS are to use consistent past tense and to make sure you develop your characters by adding in details of their appearance, personalities and clothing. You did a good job of describing what happened.
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